Tuesday, May 28

Shutting My Eyes

Shutting my eyes
brings the face of abuelo
patiently listening

patiently listening
to my tale about the tree
and how I almost fell

I almost fell down
from that knotty tree
I say and point



12 comments:

  1. I like how the last line cascades into the beginning of the next stanza. It has a sort of haiku feeling to it. Nice.

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  2. Thanks for sharing such a lovely memory.

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  3. the image you paint is so vivid
    the years slip away - don't they?

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  4. Wonderful memories thank you for sharing :)

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  5. Very nice - you have a lovely light way of putting things.

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  6. Sweet memories of childhood, thank you for sharing.

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  7. such memories just bring smile...

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  8. a dreamy memory - I watched it play out from a cloud....

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  9. what a memory.. and a lot of whatif...

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  10. Very well written. I can see the story unfold in my mind.

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