Saturday, January 19

Sunday Mini-Challenge: Chained Rhyme, Part One

There's a rumble in my tummy
crummy times have fallen upon me
we wish there'd be more in our home
gnomes in the garden eat more
horrible times are here
we're searching for anything good
would you spare us some change
strange that we used to be friends
lend us anything please
cheese? bread? or sardines?

13 comments:

  1. Ouch! This has some teeth that plays really well with the form.

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  2. really clever and captures the feelings of the scenario. well done

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  3. Your poem really illustrates the rhythm of this form, Charleen. And your point of view is whimsical, yet also serious underneath. Thanks for joining us today and working to the challenge.

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  4. "gnomes in the garden eat more" ...ouch! This is so well done, it makes me feel guilty. Good work!
    K

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  5. Yes - it has a grim nursery rhyme quality. Brothers Grimm! k.

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  6. I agree with the rest of them...it does feel whimsical but then i carries that undertone of serious. You used the form well, Charleen!!

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  7. Well done! I agree, both whimsical and exploring a serious subject.

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  8. Hunger amplified, here. And the gnomes are a perfect accent. Feels like the scene wherein Katniss receives a tossed-off loaf. Do you know it?

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/20/the-reason-why/

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    1. Yes! I believe I do remember that scene. :-)

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  9. Definitely a grim poem with some sharp teeth! I like it. :)

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  10. It sounds as if you wrote what was foremost on your mind..a clever use of the form;)

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    1. You hit the nail on the head! I was absolutely starved when I wrote this poem and groaning about having to do groceries in this recession/depression (whatever the politicians are calling it these days).

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